Start with the basics. The order doesn't really matter.
Just be sure what you write makes sense.
Who: my daughters
What: danced and sang
When: non-stop Saturday
Where: all over my house
Why: because they are in love with the movie Frozen
Then add descriptive language to make your poem "'delicious"
My lovely, sweet 3 and 5 year old daughters
(even though I asked them nicely to cease this incessant activity)
danced wildly and sang loudly, like stars on the big screen
throughout the entire, sunny, Saturday
in every room of our room of our bright, yellow house
because they are in love with the movie Frozen,
a movie I now wish they could erase from their memory
and mine. That's right, girls, Let It Go,
PLEASE, Let It Go.
What does YOUR Who What When Where Why Poem say? Please share it with us in the Comments!
Monday, April 21, 2014
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to Mr, Pahl
ReplyDeleteI like how you say what day is it and add non-stop and I like whan you say Let It Go,
PLEASE, Let It Go at the end. And tell how old they are
By Darren
Who: Steve
ReplyDeleteWhat: climb a stick
When:?
Where: at my house in a cage
Why: for the heck of it
Steve, a spikey toothed lizard
Starts climbing what looks like a polished stick
Unknown timing because he always climbs his stick
At my house in a giant wooden cage
For the heck of it
Sebastian R
You have a lizard? Wow! That is so cool. You could always put "All the time" in your when column!
DeleteWho: Steve
ReplyDeleteWhat: found emerald
When: last week
Where: snowy mountain
Why:?
Steve, an odd person who loves golden butter!
Digging in the ground and randomly found green emerald
Last week
Started at a snowy mountain
Steve does not know why
-Cam
Cam, This seem so interesting to me. This poem makes me want to know more about Steve, he is like a mountain pirate finding treasure!
DeleteWho: me!
ReplyDeleteWhat: finding eggs
When: Sunday morning
Where: my big yellow house
Why: it was Easter
I was in
My back yard searching and searching
For colorful eggs that my parents hid for me
And it was Sunday morning
I was at my big yellow house
It was Easter!
Avarielle
Avarielle, This poem reminds me of my home during Easter. I love how you described your house as big and yellow!, I am picturing the most spring easter home, I can sense your excitement about Easter in your poem. Were the eggs eggs you died, or plastic eggs filled with a surprise?
DeleteWho: Elan (my brother) and me
ReplyDeleteWhat: passing a football
Where: our yard
Why: to get my brother ready for middle 8th grade football
My amazing 8th grade brother Elan and I
We’re passing a football on a sunny day
In our grass filled yard under our old redwood tree
To get my brother ready for rough 8th grade football
By: Neri
Neri, Sounds like you all are nice caring brothers by helping your brother get prepared for some rough football! I loved how you were detailed about the type of tree in your yard, it helped me picture you all passing the ball in my head. Do you think you will want to play football as well? This could be practice for you too!
DeleteWho: Owen
ReplyDeleteWhat: trying to see the Easter bunny
When: Saturday night
Where: on my bed
Why: because I was tricking him
My silly five year old little brother Owen,
He was trying to see the Easter bunny he stares silently at the roof
On the dark joyful Saturday night,
because I was tricking him into thinking that the Easter bunny was already there
By:Kayden
Kayden, I love this poem! It is very sweet. I have an older sister who use to trick me like that all the time. You use great vocabulary in your poem, i love the description: dark joyful saturday night, I also like how you describe your brother as silly, good job!
DeleteWho: Eden
ReplyDeleteWhat: Dancing the disco
When: Monday 3:30
Where: At home
Why: Heard to many Elvis songs
Eden my cute little sister
w dancing the disco
on Monday at 3:30 PM
at our tan/brown house
apparently she had heard too many Elvis songs.
By: Asher
Dear Asher,
DeleteI really; liked your poem because you used a lot of descriptive righting, (and because you used your little sister).
From,
Sarah M.
Asher, I enjoyed reading your poem, I have such a funny picture in my mind when I read this poem, you sister seems like a fun friend to have around!
DeleteWho: Elaine
ReplyDeleteWhat: walking
When: Easter
Where: All over the house
Why: To learn how to walk
My silly one year old little sister Elaine,
Was walking wildly, quickly
On Easter day,
all over my marshmallow colored house,
because she wanted to learn how to walk.
From, Anny
Anny, I really liked how you used "marshmallow" as a word to describe your house! How creative. I never would have thought of that one. The word marshmallow is so much more fun than white. Good poem!
DeleteAnny, I loved reading your poem, sounds like you have had a fun easter.I agree with what Mary said, I loved how you used the word Marshmallow to describe your house, that is so much more exciting than white or cream even! Great poem and great description on your sister learning how to walk, i can picture walking very unstable all over the place!
DeleteWho: Who
ReplyDeleteWhat: Dancing and singing
When: Monday after school
Where: Whoville
Why: They love it
A lovable, funny Who
Dancing and singing like the talented Taylor Swift on stage,
On Monday after the sort of boring and sort of fun school day,
In the happy, crazy planet of Whoville,
Because it may seem weird, but they love it like crazy.
From, Kyle
Dear Kyle,
DeleteI love your Who What Where When Why poem I think you did a great job. Maybe you should share it with the school.
Great job.
Signature: Yolibeth
Kyle, I am curious about your poem, did you recently watch the Lorax? or a movie about Whos or did you read a book that brought you to teh planet of whoville? I loved how you ended the poem with "it may seem weird, but they love it."
DeleteWho: My baby brother Braydon
ReplyDeleteWhat: was Dancing like a crazy baboon
When: On Sunday
Where: At my house
Why: Because we listened to his favorite song “Dark horse “by Katy Perry.
My adorable one year old baby brother Braydon,
Was shaking and bopping his curly haired head like a crazy red baboon,
On a sunny Easter Sunday,
At my beige manufactured home,
Because I played My baby brother’s favorite song “ Dark Horse” by Katy Perry on my sky blue tablet.
Hi there!
DeleteI really enjoyed reading your poem. The descriptions you used painted a great picture in my head, and I think it's funny your baby brother's favorite song is from Katy Perry! Keep up the great work!
Thanks for sharing,
Brittany (WWU student)
Awesome use of vocabulary here! I laughed when I read the comparison of your brother to a "crazy baboon". I like that you not only described your brother, but paid attention to the details of the small thing like your "sky blue" tablet. Nice job!
DeleteWho: Creeper
ReplyDeleteWhat: Exploded my house
When: Friday
Where: At my house
Why: I hit it and he got mad
After a long Friday I’m at my house and start walking to my tablet
I grab my pitch black Sony tablet and started up Minecraft
I spawn in a deep hole and I yelled “WHY! I had diamonds!” With a squeaky voice
“It had to be a creeper!” I keep yelling
Why did this happen I said to myself
Then I remembered yesterday I sneaked up behind a creeper and hit it and ran off
I had to start everything over
Then I started to get to work
The End
By: Ellis
Dear Ellis,
DeleteI like how you typed how your voice sounded like. Also I like how you describe the tablet.
From, Anny
The 3,000 year old Easter bunny was,
ReplyDeleteSearching for the colorful eggs he dropped,
In the dark foggy forest,
So the nice kids could have a fantastic Easter.
By, Maximus
What: Is a football player
ReplyDeleteWhen: since 1998
Where: colts & broncos
Why: he is good at football
Who: Peyton Manning
Peyton Manning is a very good quarter back
He has been playing with the colts since 1998-2012 and with the broncos since 2012-2013
His family history runs through out football
Who: Me
ReplyDeleteWhat: Me growing wings
When: In the middle of the night
Where: In my bedroom
Why: A piece of enchanted ash floated onto my back during our family grill out
It happened to me, yeah that’s right, it all happened to me,
I grew huge paper Wight wings. (At the time, it actually made me feel like an angel floating on a fluffy cloud).
I grew them right in the middle of the pitch black, dead silent night.
They appeared while I was sitting there on the top of my loft reading Judy Blume,
Tales of a Fourth Grade Nothing.
For some strange reason I had the wings because an enchanted piece of ash floated onto my back during our family grill out.
This poem is by:
Sarah M.
Who: chocolate man with sprinkles
ReplyDeleteWhat: bought some caramel to put in him
When: 3000000bc
Where : A dumpster with wolfs
To: taste remarkable
Chocolate man with sprinkles. He was 72% cocoa with rainbow sprinkles. Walk down the stone side walk to the metal dumpster . They had toxic waste and extreme wolfs. All he wanted was caramel to put in him. All so he could taste better but now smells like an old man
-Jackson
Dear Mr.Pahl,
ReplyDeleteThat is very funny how you said let it go, girls, let it go, because that is a song on the movie. “let it go, let it go, I can’t hold it back anymore” is the part that they were singing.
-Alanis
Dear Tori,
ReplyDeleteHi Tori while you were gone I made a who, what, when and why poems I made a minecraft poem
From,
Cam
Dear wwu students
ReplyDeleteThe Who What When Where Why poems are silly and remarkable.
from,mattias
Dear, Sarah
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem because you based it on a story that you had already wrote I mean I should know I am one of your best friends.
From Asher
Who: Annabella
ReplyDeleteWhat: Had fun
Where: Her friend Athena’s house
When: Easter 2014
Why: Easter egg hunt
Annabella, an excellent student from Mr.Pahl’s class had fun at her crazy friends wooden house that she has known since preschool, April 20 2014 to be at a family Easter egg hunt.
By: Annabella
Dear Mr. Pahl,
ReplyDeleteI understand that my writing must make sense. And it does! I just decided to get a little crazy…
One foggy midnight,
Far in the country,
A crazy, tye-dye circle
Rolled down a green hill
To get to Tokyo
So he could eat wasabi.
Who? Silas
ReplyDeleteWhat? Went to a game
When? At eight o’clock
Where? At north side soccer field
Why? To show them how’s boss
Amazing Silas
Went to a game
At eight o’clock he played
He played his game at north side field
and showed all them how is boss
From Silas
Who? Alanis
ReplyDeleteWhat? Eating doughnuts
When? In the middle of the night
Where? In bed
Why? Can’t fall sleep
Alanis, a long haired energetic girl, almost 10,
lying in bed, in the middle of the night.
Shivering like an armadillo in the arctic with my eyes wide open because I can’t go to sleep.
Dear Mr.Pahl,
ReplyDeleteHere’s my Who? What? When? Where? Why? Poem.
Mr. Yax, a silly old man, acted like he was a rhyming man.
Mr. Yax here ate mash mats.
He ate his mash mats right after sunrise.
Mr. Yax ate lonely in his upside down house.
But the real question is why?........
Because he….. had a tummy ache?
-Elizabeth
Who: Barbarians
ReplyDeleteWhat: Attacked the village
When: In the sunrise
Where: Grassy areas
Why: To bring back barbarian king
The barbarians had sharp swords as sharp as daggers.
All 70 barbarians attacked the village with ghoulish faces on them.
They attacked as soon as sunrise hit.
They were in a grassy area so it was easy to sneak around.
They finally found the groaning barbarian king and brought him back to their village.
Sincerely, your student Eli
Dear Eli,
DeleteYour poem is very descriptive! I could picture the tall grass, and men hurrying get back their king. I wonder what inspired you to write this poem? I give it two thumbs up! Nice work.
Thanks for sharing,
Brittany (WWU student)
Who? Yolibeth
ReplyDeleteWhat? Got up
When? Early that morning
Where? Living room
Why? To watch TV
Yolibeth got up early that morning walking into the living room to watch TV.
Signature: Yolibeth
Who? Saturn
ReplyDeleteWhat? Moved
Where? Next to Pluto in space
Why? Jupiter
A lovely ringed planet, Saturn
Moved quietly
In 2014 at 12:00 p.m.
Next to cold but kind hearted Pluto.
Because big o’ll Jupiter was acting monstrous.
Did you like them poem please let me know?
By, Charlie
Who? Peter Cotton Tail.
ReplyDeleteWhat? Hid Easter Eggs.
When? Easter Morning.
Where? Roosevelt Park.
Why? For kids.
Rapidly Peter Cotton Tail,
Hid colorful Easter Eggs,
In the Morning sunlight,
In Roosevelt Park,
For kids to find later in the day,
By Izabelle
Who? Archers
ReplyDeleteWhat? Picked up a bow
When? Afternoon
Where? In the middle of nowhere
Why? To attack a village
The Purple haired archers
Picked up their elegant Golden bow and their sheath with flaming arrows inside
In the middle of the day
To attack a the deadly monstrous village and mirage their town hall with arrows and take their precious loot
From,
Eric
Who? A bird
ReplyDeleteWhat? Woke up
When? At 3am
Where? In a dumpster
Why? To find out he was covered by trash
A bright yellow and green bird with wings like roses
Woke up fiercely and smelly
At 3am in the morning
In a dumpster of trash
To find out that he was trembled by pounds of trash
From, Alex
Who? Horse
ReplyDeleteWhat? Ran around
When? Sunset
Where? Field
Why? He does it every day
The bay stallion
swiftly galloped around
the field with lushes green
grass and blooming flowers
at sunset
to tire himself out before
his bedtime
By Miranda R.T. Slater
Who: Steve
ReplyDeleteWhat: Built a house
When: In the morning
Why: To not die
Steve a black haired man, with a blue shirt.
Built a house to protect him from the growling monsters.
It was still morning “plenty of time, still”
He didn't want to die on the first day so he built a house.
Who? Commander J. Bob
ReplyDeleteWhat? Ran behind seawall
When? Early morning
Where? D Day
Why? Reload rifle
Young pale Commander J. Bob
Ran behind the muddy seawall
In the early smoky morning
On the grimy D Day beach
To reload his rifle.
Dear Mr. Pahl,
ReplyDeleteMy mom hates it when I put frozen on because I say all the words to it.
I like it when the giant from the shop says” YooHoo, Big summer blow out, half off swimming suits, glogs, and sun block in my adventure, ya!”
I also like when aloaf says” I dont have a skull………or……….Bones”
My favorite character is aloaf and ana.
My favorite song is Do you wanna build a snowman, Let it go my sister loves let it go and she is 16 years old. My other favorite song is Love is an open door.
From Evyn
Who? Frost witch
ReplyDeleteWhat? Picked up her spell book
When? Break of dawn
Where? The outskirts of a village
Why? To attack for loot
The tall Frost witch
Picked up her enormous spell book
In the break of dawn
At the outskirts of a village to attack and steal their precious loot.
From,
Eric
Who? Commander J. Bob
ReplyDeleteWhat? Ran behind seawall
When? Early morning
Where? D Day
Why? Reload rifle
Young pale Commander J. Bob
Ran behind the muddy seawall
In the early smoky morning
On the grimy D Day beach
To reload his rifle.
From Benjamin
Who? Little tank
ReplyDeleteWhat? Drove up the hill
When? Early morning
Where? D Day
Why? To win the war
The green little tank
Treaded up the mortar and bullet holed hill
On an early smoky morning on the grimy D DAY
To win the terrible war.
From Benjamin
Dear Mr. Pahl,
ReplyDeleteWho? Vanessa and Sarah
What? Went to get food
When? After school
Where? At Dairy Queen
Why? We had a enough money
Sarah and I
Went to get food for our stomachs
After school we were famished and bored
Dairy Queen was close to our house
We had a enough money to buy what we wanted
By Vanessa
Who? Francis the puppet
ReplyDeleteWhat? Awoke on a dark lightning filled night
When? At midnight
Where? In a abandon subway
Why? To grab a bight
It was November 1st and Francis the puppet awoke in a flash for it was a electric charged night and he woke up on a stained glass shelf around midnight in a abandon subway to grab a bight of stale left over saltines.
By, Jaymeson
Who? Angle
ReplyDeleteWhat? Flew
Where? The library
When? Saturday
Why? Read
A lovely Angle faithfully flew. To the lovely lime green library at 2:00. To read rough ringing rebellious books, that will hook like a worm on a hook you from the first Inky word.
By Bella Matthews
Who? Francis the puppet
ReplyDeleteWhat? Awoke on a dark lightning filled night
When? At midnight
Where? In a abandon subway
Why? To grab a bight
It was November 1st and Francis the puppet awoke in a flash for it was a electric charged night and he woke up on a stained glass shelf around midnight in a abandon subway to grab a bight of stale left over saltines.
By, Jaymeson
Who: Brandon
ReplyDeleteWhat: Dancing happily
When: At night
Where: Mt. St. Helens
Why: Jumping off
When Brandon was outside he was dancing happily at night when the bright moon shining Brandon hopped on a bus so he could go to Mt. St. Helen's once the bus arrived Brandon jumped out of the bus and jumped off of Mt. St. Helen's ahhhhhhhhh SPLAT!
Who? Monster
ReplyDeleteWhat? Fell
Where? The dump
When? 1:00 a.m.
Why? Not smart
An ogely boogely purple nosed monster with a pencil yellow pencil tumbled down the candy bridge at 1:00 a.m. in the rotting dump because he did not know how to do math.
By Bella Matthews
What a creative poem! I loved reading it!
DeleteWho? Tim
ReplyDeleteWhat? Sprinted to the Batmobile
When? During midnight
Where? Top secret science lab
Why? To genetically mutate people
Tim, an exited man in his late twenty’s, sprinted to his Batmobile with his sidekick Brandon at midnight, and drove to the top secret science lab to genetically mutate people.
From Tim.