This has been a really popular poem structure with my previous classes, so I continue to introduce it each year. The way to write this poem is to answer each question on each line. It's easiest to start with a really basic idea, then do some revising to make it "delicious!"
Why does Mr. Pahl call vivid language "delicious?" Well, several years ago, I read Grace Lin's Year of the Dog to my class. She writes beautifully of the feasts her Chinese American family had on special occasions when she was growing up. Each time we read a passage about one of these feasts, several students would exclaim, "That sounds so delicious!" And this is how "delicious words" came to be. Grace Lin's books are full of this exceptional, descriptive language. I highly recommend them.
Please share your Who? What? When? Where? Why? Poems in the comments!
Wednesday, February 22, 2012
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The joyful girl Ava,
ReplyDeleteTook a fun filled vacation,
In the gross, rainy winter,
To the beautiful sunny warm country Mexico,
So she could get some vitamin D!!!!!
Who what when where why poem
ReplyDeleteMy friend plump Robert
Went on a glorious stroll
After a bountiful feast
In the jade treed forest
To find the mythical Amber Dragon
From Daniel
Huver a math loving 10 year old 4th grader
ReplyDeleteWent outside to ride his Bike
On a Sunday afternoon
On his street
To get his friend
One beautiful crisp summer afternoon
ReplyDeletemy aunt’s 12 year old appaloosa stallion Kieote
was playing in the mud
because it was as hot as Texas
From,
Kate
I like how you have a lot of descriptive words like one beautiful crisp summer.
DeleteSincerely
Brooke
On a warm, summer afternoon,
ReplyDeleteA purple playful Persian kitten
Crept through the towering emerald green grass,
As quiet as a hawk,
About to pounce on an unexpecting petite scarlet breasted robin,
Plucking worms the color of roses from the edge of the middle school soccer field,
That was full of soil.
Sincerely,
Ashley G.
Wow Ashley! I can see the picture in my head. Nice descriptive words like emerald green grass. Sincerely,
DeleteSara
Me Josh, a ten year old boy
ReplyDeletetumbled loudly down the stairs
at 2:00 on Monday morning
in my big, blue 2 story house
because I was careless.
From,
Josh
A lime green, four eyed alien who is a boy,
ReplyDeleteWent to the alien store,
When the sun was just rising like a cherry blossom,
At the planet Mercury,
because he was out of alien fruit.
By Kathy
I like all the descriptive words like a lime green.
DeleteSincerely
Brooke
My Mom, My crafty intelligent mom
ReplyDeleteSlept like a murky black baby cat
On her queen size bed
On a humid cloudy Sunday morning
Because she was tired
From, Anna
Me and my wonderful B.F. (best friend) Kathy
ReplyDeleteLaughed like a hyena, sweated like we wear on the sun and played with each other like it was the best day ever
On a very hot sunny Saturday
At Kathy’s sparkling clean nice house
Well playing her amazing Xbox 360!!!
Sincerely
Brooke
Sterling a blondish brownish haired boy Kicks a soccer ball with all his might At 1:30 on Saturday in Spring At a soccer game on Northwest Field from, Lilly
ReplyDeleteAvery
ReplyDeleteHelped me on my work
Yesterday morning
At our awesome beautiful school
Because I needed help with a problem on my fun math review
from, Sa`mya
a martial artist that’s named Guru who is in his teens went to the food-filled refrigerator door at midnight on a full moon at a dojo because he was starving
ReplyDeleteBy Kathy