Start with basics- the order doesn't really matter; just be sure it makes sense:
Who? Mr. Pahl
What? got out of bed
When? early one morning
Where? into the kitchen
Why? to make coffee
Then add descriptive language to make your poem "delicious."
Mr. Pahl, a tired, short haired man in his late 30's,
stumbled out of his comfortable, warm bed,
like a wobbly, newborn calf,
into the cold, dark kitchen,
early one morning,
to brew his favorite, steaming, hot coffee,
because his lovely, two year old daughter had kept him awake most of the long, sleepless night.
Please share your 5W poem with us! Click on "comments" to share.
Friday, December 17, 2010
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Mrs. Ackerson, a person who rather despises the mall, with its fluorescent lights, unsolicited advertisements, and consumerism,
ReplyDeletewent to the mall
this afternoon after spending a quality morning pouring wisdom into the minds of young children,
to do some Christmas shopping
so she wouldn't have to go to the mall again for a very very long time.
Hi Mr. Pahl and class,
ReplyDeleteI had hoped to have my class post something on this blog before our break but we got too busy and the time slipped by. Perhaps in January we will send you some letters.
I have some great stories to tell you about Mr. Pahl. I use to babysit him when he was a little guy. He is very special to me.
Mrs. Fain
Dear Mr.Pahl,
ReplyDeleteWho: Ava, her dad and her dog Frankie
What:Went for an outing
Where: back to Sunnyland and Memorial Park
When: After school Monday
Why: To tire out the dog and Ava
Who: Ava, her dad and dog Frankie, needed a run.
What: They went to Sunnyland while still there was sun.
When: The sun going down told us that dinnertime was near.
Where: The park and the playground,they sure were dear.
Why:Our crazy black dog's face had grown so so long.
From, David -Ava's dad.
Dear Mrs. Fain,
ReplyDeleteThank you for writing! I am so glad you were able to visit our class blog. Please don't share anything with the students that will embarrass me too much!
We would love to write letters with your students. If you send me a list of their names, we can get started soon!
I miss you,
Mr. Pahl
Dear Mr.Pahl,
ReplyDeleteWho: A sleepy brown hedgehog,
What: woke up from a long winter’s sleep,
When: after the bright orange sunset,
Where: deep in the dark forest,
Why: because he wanted to search for food
A sleepy brown hedgehog,
woke up from a long winter’s sleep,
after the bright orange sunset,
deep in the dark forest,
because he wanted to search for food
Sincerely, Cycle Star
Thanks Mr. Pahl for making learning and writing poetry so much fun!
ReplyDeleteHere's a 5 W poem from Alexandia and me (her mom)
The hungry humungous hippo
hopped down the rocky trail,
early one sunny morning
near the water's edge,
to calm his ravenous thirst.
Now we need to get a drink of water. Cheers!
Sincerely,
Alexandria's Mom
Who: Jadyn
ReplyDeleteWhat:Is coming out of her shell
When: Jan. 13
Where: At school
Who: Mr. Pahl
Why: Because he is a very good teacher
Jadyn is coming out of her shell because today at school she read out loud n front of the whole school because Mr. Pahl has a way with kids to bring out the best in them.
Bev, Jadyn's grandma
Brennan
ReplyDeletegot out of bed
9:24 in the morning
at home
to eat food.
From doggy
Dear Mr. Pahl and Students,
ReplyDeleteThe Martin Luther King Jr. presentation was so fantastic! I was so impressed with all of the singing and presenting that you did at the assembly. It was a very important day!
Sincerely,
Tara (Finnigan's mom)
Dear Mr. Pahl,
ReplyDeleteWho: A baby deer
What: Came out of the woods
When: Early spring
Why: So it could have air
A small little baby deer came out of the wet and soggy woods. One bright and shiny early spring morning so it could have a fresh breath of air.
Sincerely,
Firewolf
Dear Mr.Pahl,
ReplyDeleteThe creeping, creature of the country side,
went out for a long morning walk,
in the cold and creaky morning,
to the very edge of town,
because he felt energetic and wanted to fall into a long sleep.
Sincerely,
Cycle Star
A striped slithering snake,
ReplyDeleteslithered to catch his juicy, delicious prey,
in the humid and dangerous afternoon,
in the deep, dark forest,
because his neighber kept stealing his meaty food.
Sincerely,
Cycle Star
Dear Class
ReplyDeleteThe anonymous creature
walked out in the bighting blistering cold
to search for it's warm mate
in the howling tundra of Russia.
Love,
Shark Fin
a blond funny girl named Luna
ReplyDeletewent to her hard working dad
in the blazing afternoon
in their beatiful house
because she whanted her dad to read her a story
sincerely,
Star
A blond little girl named Luna
ReplyDeletewas trying to go sleep on her cofterble bed
a Friday night at 12;30
because she was scared of the monster under her bed
From'
Jenny
Andrea, a small,dark skined woman
ReplyDeletewas going to be late for a docter's appointment
because her huge white labrador chewed up her car key and it wouldn't fit in the key hole anymore.
Dear Mr. Pahl
ReplyDeleteI want to tell you a five w poem
Who: An owl
What: Flew
When: A winter night
Where: The woods
Why: To find somewhere warm
One big owl soared on a dark and gloomy moonlit winter night to the woods. So it could find a warm place to hide at.
Sincerely, Firewolf
Dear Class,
ReplyDeleteA humungous, hurdling hippo,
charged the blue buff rhinoceros,
late one blistering morning,
on the sandy beach of Africa,
because the rhinoceros stole his delicious food.
Sincerely,
Cycle Star
Dear Class,
ReplyDeleteA green, slimy, warty frog,
tumbled out into the open wild,
deep in the gloomy night,
because a couple of muddy hooves shoved him forward.
Sincerely,
Cycle Star
Dear Class,
ReplyDeleteA tired buff man,
woke up from a long, dreadful sleep,
right when the bright orange sun stared to rise,
at his well seeded farm,
because a woodpecker kept pecking at his window.
Sincerely,
Alexandria
who:friendly roadrunner
ReplyDeletewhat:build a school
when:early in the morning
where:by rymfire drive
why:cause need people to learn
Who: Danny
ReplyDeleteWhat: Saw the Easter bunny
When: On Easter morning
Where: In a forest
Why: Because he was hopping away.
The Young Easter bunny was setting up a Easter hunt competition. The child with the most eggs would win the competition.